I stared stupidly at Jonathon, "What?" He ran his hand through his hair again, "Would you like to go out with me?" After a second when I relized he had just asked me out, I finally choked out "I'd love to." He smiled and handed me the eraser, "Thanks." He added. "For what?" I asked transfixed with his blue eyes. "For both." I felt my heart start to beat as he smiled at me. He then said "I'll pick you up at 6:30, is that ok?" "Yyeah." I sputterd out finally. He turned and then the bell rang. Once outside the reality of actually being asked out by Jonathon the man of my dreams since 2nd grade dawned on me, "How was I going to dress, how would I fix my hair" "I knew I was in trouble." Amber came out behind me, "So what did you guys talk about?" she asked with a smile on her face. "He asked me out." That got her attention "Oh my god, What did you say?!" "I said yes." I replied my excitement reaching her point. "But seriously, what was I going to wear?"
Thats all I have time for
Points:
Time spent:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
125,020 Literary Works • 672,861 Reviews
Are you guys interested in teaming up with me to write this story(I mean 50's phrases and little things like that??? I could really use the help
Thanx
Thanx Kay Kay
Good job...sorry I don't have time to crit the mistakes....bell's about to ring. Keep up the good work Jade!!!